New Movie Concept

As you know, I just finished the rough draft of my first screenplay. Now I am going to start working on a new screenplay concept. The plan is to finish the outline for new concept and then go back and rewrite the first screenplay.

I thought I’d give you a little preview of my next screenplay concept right here, right now.

I am going to title the movie, “Killer Crossover.”

The story revolves around a serial killer who is targets girls’ basketball players. In order to catch the killer, one dectective will have to go under cover to lure out the killer.

It’s Juwanna Mann meets Underclassman.

I’m hoping to get a young Rapper/R&Ber to play the lead. What do you think?

What? You don’t like it? Seriously?

It took me about 5 minutes to think all that up. The sad thing is that could actually get made now-a-days. Even sadder, my first screenplay isn’t much better.

But I am working on a new script. The concept is kind of like the Superman story, but with my own twist. I like how it is going so far, but I could foresee problems writing it (i.e. I want to cram too many things in it).

I’ll let you know when it’s finished.

Ultimate Avengers

A week ago I watched The Invincible Iron Man (Marvel Cartoon) and was impressed with the animation, but thought that the story could use some work.

Knowing this, I decided to give The Ultimate Avengers a whirl. I know it has been out a while, but I was never really all that interested until now.

So, the DVD arrived on Netflix on Saturday (how does anyone live with out Netflix?) and I watched it on Sunday (because Patti was at work).  It was almost the opposite of Iron Man.

The animation was mediocre (reminiscent of TV show animation).  But the story was really entertaining.

Overall I gave the movie 4 stars out of 5 on Netflix.

So, today (Tuesday 2/20) The Prestige came out on DVD. While I thought that movie was mediocre at best, Patti absolutely loved it, so I had to stop at Best Buy to pick it up.

While I was there, I flipped through the Sunday ad. I realized that a bunch of movies are on sale for $5 (Including Down in the Valley, The Punisher, and several others).

Among these, was the Ultimate Avengers DVD. I went ahead and pciked it up. But when I did, I thought, “if only I knew that this was on sale and that it was good, I wouldn’t have had to use up a Netflix slot on it.”

So, here I am. Letting you know that you can go to Best Buy and buy the Ultimate Avengers for $5 and enjoy a solid movie.

The Mikey Screenplay

If you don’t know, I’ve been working on writing a screenplay for some time now (I’d estimate it’s been about 8 months since I first started the idea). I’m glad to announce that I have actually finished the first draft (Yeah, I know it has been a long time for just a first draft).

If you’d like to read it, shoot me an e-mail at hinux1@yahoo.com.

The script does have quite a few things I need to work on. Here is a list of things that I think I need to work on:

A) The screenplay is only 78 pages (feature length screenplays fall in the 90-120 page range).

B) There is little to decipher one character from another. I focused more on the plot than the characters when writing. I plan on fleshing out my characters when I do the rewrite.

C) The ending is weak. I had a bunch of ideas on how to end it and none of them stood at as being great. So, I ended up with a mismash of concepts.

D) I used too much referrential humor. Sure, I find it funny, but I almost feel like I’ve just cut and pasted a bunch of other movies to make my own dialogue (even though that is kind of how I talk with my friends/family).

E) Too many characters. I think this works hand in hand with problem B. With the sheer number of characters. Even I, the writer, had difficulty keeping them straight at times.

F) Monosyllabic dialogue at the beginning. When I started, I didn’t have a real strong feel for dialogue and most conversations are just what needs to be said to move the story forward.

So, get a copy, read it for yourself, and let me know if there are other problems in which I should work on.

I appreciate any advise you leave for me. Thank you!